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Few have ever witnessed the dancing of the moth
When he flits across the ceiling in the night
A most magical scene as he dances back and forth
And he's never lacking elegance in flight

As he swoops and twirls to a song all his own
A song, of which, us humans will never hear
And at first glance he appears to dance alone
A closer look reveals that something's there

Once he had a partner he loved with all his heart
And when she passed she left a piece behind
For their souls could not bear to ever have to part
So she left her shadow there for him to find

For this serenade's designed not for one but two
It's a tribute for the lovers on this night
Once again they have danced, as lovers often do
Souls entwined together in their flight

They, then, made one last circle around the room
Wings fluttering they flew side-by-side
It seems the sun's rays that morning came too soon
He gave a bow, settled down, and died

Sometimes I lay awake in the middle of the night
Watching shadows as they dance back and forth
And, still, I've yet to see as beautiful a sight
As when I watched the dance of the moth
:iconoctoberazriel:
This piece was actually inspired from a conversation...

Caroline- "I think there's a moth mating with it's shadow on the ceiling..."
Me- "And yet somehow thats weird but beautiful..."</i>
Caroline- "Everything's like that. "
Me- "Maybe it's it's lover's shadow that she left behind while she's away..."</i>
Caroline- "You make everything seem so beautiful."

Yeah....and I sort of took off with the idea from there...I've really no idea how my mind jumped to the conclusion that it was the shadow of his lover. But I liked the thought that maybe it was.

This is for the "From Scripts to Flicks" contest.

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So....I was a runner-up in the contest which I find really
awesome!!! You've no idea how much that made my day!
Would be even more awesome if someone actually uses
this poem to make a film. I'd love to see something done
with it. If it isn't I'm not going to complain. Not much else
to say so I'm going to end this edit here. Bye! :D :heart:
----------------------SECOND EDIT!-----------------------
This is the amazing film based off of my work!
2:21
Be sure to check it out. He's really done just an amazing job.
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!Of-Denmark Apr 19, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
I never been one for poems but yours deserve a fav :)
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~OctoberAzriel Apr 25, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much hun. I really appreciate it.:hug:
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beautifully done. :) good to see talent like this still around in a crazy world.
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Mood: Love ~OctoberAzriel Dec 3, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks a lot hun. I really appreciate it.:hug:
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!ReaperzFallenAngel Aug 31, 2010   Photographer
This is so beautiful <3
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~OctoberAzriel Aug 31, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Aww, thanks so much hun.:hug:
I appreciate it.
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!ReaperzFallenAngel Aug 31, 2010   Photographer
ur welcome =)
u're really talented =D
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Mood: Love `TeaPhotography Mar 9, 2010  Professional General Artist
:wow: I'm floored, I'm surprised I didn't see it sooner, [but still there are enough I've likely not seen... :hmm: ] but I should be overjoyed I've seen this NOW! :sun:

I just love how you play with words.... :heart:
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~OctoberAzriel Mar 9, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much Tea. I'm glad you enjoyed it.:heart::)

If you get the chance you should check out the film based off this which I linked to in the comments. It's quite lovely.
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~carvingbackbone Jan 15, 2010  Student General Artist
i was so sooo excited to see a link to your writing here mention on today's (the 15th) DD that was a literature piece. in the comments, the writer had this piece of literature mentioned for people to come check out and i saw your name and i was like AHHHH! october!! sarah! that's my girl!!
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