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"I hate you."

Just ignore them.
They're just words.
Words can never hurt me.

"I hate you."

They're just words.
They can't hurt me.
Why do I feel this pain?

"I hate you."

They can't hurt me.
Why do I feel this pain?
Why do the tears keep falling?

"I hate you."

Just three little words.
Why do they hurt so much?
They're just words.

Just words.
...:tears:
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Astrid109PA Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2008
I really like this, and the repetition works very well to get your feelings across.

Don't be sad!! :glomp:
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OctoberAzriel Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much, very appreciated.:hug:

*And I am no longer sad, but thanks for the concern.:heart:
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name--whoop--name Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2008
I feel like I’m intruding
on something personal
something private
something no one should have to go through in the first place
but I just thought you should know
that you articulated the pain
in a way I could understand
and I think you need to know
that you are loved.

even if it is from just a random dA stranger.
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OctoberAzriel Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks hun.:hug:
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CyanSprinkles Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2008
This is really good! You have structure. I like it when poetry has visual neatness. ^^ it's a bonus that your repetition is powerful. yessss...
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OctoberAzriel Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. :)
Yeah I like to get the point across, keep the focus. Unfortunately most of my readers don't exactly understand poetry and so I get something like, "Hey it doesn't rhyme!"or "That was good."
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CyanSprinkles Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2008
lol x.x yes. but it's nice to see a poet who understands that poetry actually does have to have poetic elements, not just stanzas at random. ^^ i appreciate the thought u put into it.
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OctoberAzriel Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
I rarely do random. And even if I do random, it's not really random.:XD:
I basically stick to all the rules, for anything that has to do with writing.
I've read some of what is supposed to be modern poetry, and have been completely dumbfounded because it's just a paragraph that someone split wrong so they could say it was stanzas.
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CyanSprinkles Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2008
lol yes. x.x like the stuff in the newspaper. O.o how do they even print that?!
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OctoberAzriel Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
It's because I don't think they actually read it. More like use it to torture our poor souls.
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CyanSprinkles Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2008
LOL xD yes!
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OctoberAzriel Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Glad you agree. Yeah it really is rubbish what they print, drives me crazy.
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Dawnlilly81 Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2008
that was really good, sad but good writing.
it's amazing how much words can hurt more
than actions sometimes. scratch that, words
acutually are stronger than actions cuz u
can't take words back. but you can heal actions.
i'm so sorry :hug:
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OctoberAzriel Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, my weekend totally sucked. But everyones been cheering me up. :hug:
Especially :iconplatinummyr::iconheartofwings:& :iconkazumisangel:. They all sent me nice notes(a few emails) and stuff.:)
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Dawnlilly81 Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2008
i'm glad. it was beautifully written though!
i hope your week brightens up! :hug:
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OctoberAzriel Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
I think it will.:hug: And thanks so much.:heart:
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Dawnlilly81 Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2008
if u need to talk or vent, i'm here. :hug:
anytime, you're an amazing friend! ur always
loved here. you're an amazing person. you really
are.
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OctoberAzriel Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks hun, your really great and that means the world to me.:hug:
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Dawnlilly81 Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2008
:)
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OctoberAzriel Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
"Sticks and stones,
May break my bones,
But words will never hurt me..."

Lies, every last word.

We have bones of steel,
But a single word
Will shatter our lonely soul.

And all we ever do is pretend
And try to hide all our pain inside.
When will we ever see
That they tricked us with
Their words?

Cause I have a heart of stone,
Yet just one word,
Sharper than a needle
Will shatter it to pieces.

So be careful what you say,
And how you say it,
Speak with reverence
For the weak willed people
That we are.

Just remember, always,
That
I will never hate you
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OctoberAzriel Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
"Lies, every last word.

We have bones of steel...
Just remember, always,
That I will never hate you"

Your words or do they belong to someone else?
They're very beautiful.

And thanks.:hug:
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
These? Are my words, written just now ^.^ I think I shall post it... *this is how nearly all of my poetry comes to be...*
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OctoberAzriel Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful words, you really have the soul of a poet.
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:aww: I think that's the first time someone's put it quite like that.. Thank you very much!
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OctoberAzriel Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Your most welcome hun.:hug:
And thank you for cheering me up.
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Hehe :giggle: You're so welcome! :glomp:. Least I could do.
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OctoberAzriel Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Very glad I've met you. Now my life has changed again, and for the better.:)
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kazumisangel Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2008
Aw, Honey. I wish I could say I know how you feel, but I don't so I'm not even going to lie, because I've never had my dad say that to me. But I know something similar, the guy that I like hates me and has said it to my friends faces many times, so I know enough about it to know that you need much more than a hug, but if that's the best I can do, it's still worth it. :hug:
I wish I could just hold you and whisper in your ear that things will get better someday, and that youshouldn't listen to him, even if it's the hardest thing to ignore. Someday, he'll regret this, and he'll realize he loves you so much more, and then you'll have the happy ending you deserve.
What made him say this, do you know? Was he drinking, maybe?
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OctoberAzriel Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
He doesn't drink, he just is almost always mad.

He says mean stuff to me all the time, but usually I just ignore it.

We were watching a movie and some girl was dying and he says, "See that, that's going to happen to you."
So my mom was like,"Whats your problem!? Why do you always have to say stuff like that to her. You sound like you hate her." Then we were all sent into our rooms while they were arguing and he says,"So what if I hate her! She's old enough, if she doesn't like it she can pack her shi* and get the fuc* out of my house! She's just a waste of space!" and thats when I put in my headphones.

It always gets like this, he blows up, my mom freaks, they argue, and then they just pretend it never happened. How could you just pretend like that?
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kazumisangel Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2008
Aw, Honey, I'm so sorry. That sucks, I can't even find the right words to describe it. You shouldn't have to put up with this, it's just unfair! I wish I could just kick him out of your life right now, tell him that you shouldn't have to leave, it's him who should get the fu^k out of the house.
Have you ever read "Daughters of Eve" by Lois Duncan? It has this one character in it who's dad is almost just like yours. I think you might appreciate it, even if it isn't exactly your situation.

I'm so sorry, Honey. If only there was a way forme to be there in person. :hug:
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OctoberAzriel Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
It appears my life is like stuck in Suckville, but I meet nice people along the way. If that makes sense.:hug:
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kazumisangel Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2008
I does, in a strangly blunt way. I know what you mean though, sometimes you just can't get back on that bus away from there.
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OctoberAzriel Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
But I make it through anyways just because of the people I meet on the road.
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kazumisangel Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2008
Horray for hitch-hikers! :boogie:
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OctoberAzriel Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:XD: hahaha Yeah, hooray.:)
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
.. I'm so sorry, even though I have no reason to be. Hearing that makes me sick to my stomach a little.

I couldn't live if my father ever said that to me. Ever. Maybe it's cause I know he never would?

I don't think it means as much, coming from a stranger in a strange world, but... You're not, and never will be, a waste of space... no matter what you do, or say.
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OctoberAzriel Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks hun, even coming from a stranger, it means more to me than you may ever know. Actually makes me feel worth while that you took the time to leave me such a nice comment. Thank you for everything.:heart::hug:
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Also, as a sidenote, I went to =heartofwings's page, and... certainly my life is changed. Not sure as of yet how much, but... thank you :hug: :heart:
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OctoberAzriel Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, that's great! She really is such an amazing artist and a great friend to me and most people she meets. That is as long as they take the time to get to know her.:) She's like an M+M hard on the outside, sweet at the core.
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Very certainly true!!!
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OctoberAzriel Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Glad you agree.
I take it you've had some time to talk to her. She's very caring isn't she?
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Dusk-of-Stars Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2008
amazing
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OctoberAzriel Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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roses-of-thorns Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
... ummm... sry for not being sympathetic, but... y can't you ppl really just ignore the words? It's not as hard as you think! If its ur enemy, then just hate them back. If its a friend, know that they'll get over it and be your friend again tomorrow (and if they don't, they're assholes) Family, they HAVE to love you
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OctoberAzriel Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Try getting over it when it's your dad.
When he says he hates you.
That he wishes you were dead.
Wants you out of his house.
Tells you your a waste of space, a loser, pathetic, not worth the air you breathe.
Then tell me what you think.
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roses-of-thorns Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
ouch... my friend Meg had something like that, but like two days later, she was sry. All you need to do is hope that they didn't mean it. And then believe it, even if its a lie. that's what I do.
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OctoberAzriel Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
So you would just believe something even if it was a lie?
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