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"I hate you."

Just ignore them.
They're just words.
Words can never hurt me.

"I hate you."

They're just words.
They can't hurt me.
Why do I feel this pain?

"I hate you."

They can't hurt me.
Why do I feel this pain?
Why do the tears keep falling?

"I hate you."

Just three little words.
Why do they hurt so much?
They're just words.

Just words.
...:tears:
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Astrid109PA Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2008
I really like this, and the repetition works very well to get your feelings across.

Don't be sad!! :glomp:
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OctoberAzriel Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much, very appreciated.:hug:

*And I am no longer sad, but thanks for the concern.:heart:
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name--whoop--name Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2008
I feel like I’m intruding
on something personal
something private
something no one should have to go through in the first place
but I just thought you should know
that you articulated the pain
in a way I could understand
and I think you need to know
that you are loved.

even if it is from just a random dA stranger.
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OctoberAzriel Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks hun.:hug:
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CyanSprinkles Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2008
This is really good! You have structure. I like it when poetry has visual neatness. ^^ it's a bonus that your repetition is powerful. yessss...
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OctoberAzriel Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. :)
Yeah I like to get the point across, keep the focus. Unfortunately most of my readers don't exactly understand poetry and so I get something like, "Hey it doesn't rhyme!"or "That was good."
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CyanSprinkles Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2008
lol x.x yes. but it's nice to see a poet who understands that poetry actually does have to have poetic elements, not just stanzas at random. ^^ i appreciate the thought u put into it.
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OctoberAzriel Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
I rarely do random. And even if I do random, it's not really random.:XD:
I basically stick to all the rules, for anything that has to do with writing.
I've read some of what is supposed to be modern poetry, and have been completely dumbfounded because it's just a paragraph that someone split wrong so they could say it was stanzas.
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